Painting with Neil

I like how the topic of this paper is different. The descriptive words in this paper such as "his eyes narrow, eyebrows drop" really gives me a sense of his mood. I think if S.L. should of put that this was a girls varsity soccer team at the top, I was under the impression it was a football game.

S.L. uses the words "previously entertained" to describe a past mood he was in, I think this is a very creative way of writing. He compares Neil's drinking to that of a "stray dog" which I think gives the reader a vivid picture. I think S.L. should of added Big E's presence a little differently, I feel like it was just placed their to fill a space.

I would of liked to know what a vuvuzela sounded like, it would of been a good descriptive detail.

I enjoyed how in between the two games S.L. added the apparent tiredness Neil began to feel. I thought it was comical how quickly Neil's mood changes.  

The ending of this paper was extremely strong. Throughout the paper though I got bored, I think it S.L. would put more descriptive detail maybe I would not of been bored.